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[LeeSUHH]

i got my nails done n my hair lookin good
im goin down town to the ghetto hoood
i got my sexy booty shakin all over town
all them haters cant stop but look at em now
you know im in the club like 50 cent
you know im bustin the moves like im missys crew
u feel im juss down here n doin my thang
so dont mess wit the best cuz you aint betta than me
and for all you haters who think you are
u better think TWICE before messin wit me

u kno im rockin them jewels
n im rockin them thangs
like im rockin these clubs
n im workin my game
u kno im lovin this thang cuz its n ezy play
like countin one to ten gurl thats the way i am

look gurl i donno where you came from
and i dunno why u messin wit me fo
but remmeber my face n remmeber
L I S A my name cuz u b hearin again n again
n ova n ova again
u can see me i b pimpin them clubs
like a real chick down on da flows
from dawn to dusk this is all i do
i b keepin it real gurl how bout chu?

cuz im rockin them jewels
n im rockin them thankgs
like im rockin these clubs
n im working my game
u kno im lovhing this thang cuz its n ezy play
like countin one to ten gurl thats the way i am

you feel i aint got nobody round like you
and you tell im not tryna play around with you
you know
i feel im playin this game i do
and im not tryna play wit that game you do

cuz im rockin them jewels
n im rockin them thangs
like im rockin these clubs
n im working my game
u know im loving this thang cuz its an ezy play
like countin one to ten
gurl thats the way i am
cuz thats the way i am
man thats the way i am.

[sweetmew]

if it really the very 1st, so it is very good=)esp. i like the 1st line)

[jori]

For the 1st time, yea it's good. In fact, it's waaaaay better than the first rap I wrote =D
But like Sonic said, the subject doesn't have to be "gangsta-style" you know?
I mean if that's what you are going for, there's no limit, but I think the general public is kind of sick of "pimpy" raps =D
Try to write with subjects about your life events and complication for practice.
But anyways, good job!
(P.S. I've been writing raps for about 4 years now. Still a noob but =D)